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Skip the physical actions you find unrealistic (although most of them are metaphorical, not 'unrealistic'). Tears welling in eyes, trembling, etc are realistic enough. Also, go inside; physical sy...
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2019-12-19T22:13:29Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#3: Attribution notice added
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2019-12-08T09:22:36Z (almost 5 years ago)
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Skip the physical actions you find unrealistic (although most of them are metaphorical, not 'unrealistic'). Tears welling in eyes, trembling, etc are realistic enough. Also, go inside; physical symptoms are not all you can show: > He felt his neck muscles tense up, his temples started bulging, he started breathing more heavily as he heard his subordinate's report. Versus, > As Richard listened to his lieutenant's report he felt a building rage, the urge to strike somebody down, break things, to roar to stop this idiocy. He was sure these feelings showed on him, but internally he struggled to repress any actual movement at all. Not only would it be unprofessional, but it was too late, the deeds were done. Now he needed a response, something besides killing everyone. When his lieutenant finished, Richard took a long moment to calm himself, eyes closed. He finally looked up to meet the lieutenant's eyes. > "Heard and understood. Give me fifteen minutes, and return for orders. Dismissed." > The lieutenant nodded once and turned to leave. A good man. A smart man.
#1: Imported from external source
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2018-07-13T15:57:29Z (over 6 years ago)
Original score: 3