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Q&A Alternatives to starting a sentence with well

I'd recommend visiting your local cafe with a notebook. Sit and listen to the people around you and see how they talk. You'll find that people often speak in fairly clipped sentences, they don't sp...

posted 6y ago by GGx - Reinstate Monica Cellio‭  ·  last activity 5y ago by System‭

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#2: Initial revision by user avatar GGx - Reinstate Monica Cellio‭ · 2019-12-08T09:30:56Z (about 5 years ago)
I'd recommend visiting your local cafe with a notebook. Sit and listen to the people around you and see how they talk. You'll find that people often speak in fairly clipped sentences, they don't spell everything out. It'll really help you learn natural dialogue.

I also watched every episode of Gilmore Girls. It sounds like a nightmare but, MAN, do these characters TALK! And Amy Sherman-Palladino has a real talent for dialogue. She also wrote The Marvelous Mrs. Maisel which is another excellent series. Both of these really really helped with my dialogue.

So, in your example, clip the dialogue a bit, don't pad it out so much:

> How did you know I was visiting the resort?
> 
> We don't see many of your kind around here.
> 
> What's that supposed to mean?
> 
> Every year we see fewer monsters, it's been declining for a decade.
> 
> Why? What happened to them?

This is just an example but HTH and Good Luck!

#1: Imported from external source by user avatar System‭ · 2018-07-29T13:03:20Z (over 6 years ago)
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