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Q&A Are characters' internal thoughts written in past or present tense?

Either can be used, as @DPT says. I heard a loud screech from beyond the gates, then silence. 'What is going on?' I thought. Here, effectively, you are presenting the thought as internal mono...

posted 6y ago by Galastel‭  ·  last activity 5y ago by System‭

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#2: Initial revision by (deleted user) · 2019-12-08T09:41:28Z (almost 5 years ago)
Either can be used, as @DPT says.

> I heard a loud screech from beyond the gates, then silence. 'What is going on?' I thought.

Here, effectively, you are presenting the thought as internal monologue. The character is effectively talking to himself. You therefore treat it as if you were writing dialogue - present tense. It doesn't really matter that the character is talking to himself rather than to someone else, nor that the words are thought rather than said out loud.

> I heard a loud screech from beyond the gates, then silence. What was going on?

In this case, as @DPT states, the thought is kept closer to the narration. The character isn't necessarily verbalising the thought, it can be more of a feeling. Consider: when you are startled, you don't necessarily verbalise in your mind 'what's going on' - by the time it would have taken you to verbalise, you're already responding in one way or another.

**Either way is valid, but they create different effects.**

#1: Imported from external source by user avatar System‭ · 2018-08-25T21:09:07Z (about 6 years ago)
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