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The CEO of the company just sent out a letter about three people who will be leaving over the next week. I drafted an email to her expressing my interest in one of the positions that is going to be...
#3: Attribution notice added
by
System
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2019-12-08T09:45:45Z (almost 5 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/q/38737 License name: CC BY-SA 3.0 License URL: https://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/
#2: Initial revision
by
Muuski
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2019-12-08T09:45:45Z (almost 5 years ago)
The CEO of the company just sent out a letter about three people who will be leaving over the next week. I drafted an email to her expressing my interest in one of the positions that is going to be open, but I noticed that just about every sentence starts with "I". I am this, I did this, I want this, blah blah blah me me me. (Just look at this post!) I like how I tell a story in the writing and that I'm talking about how I would be a good fit, but how can a self-centered letter be rewritten to be less so?
#1: Imported from external source
by
System
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2018-09-06T16:21:26Z (about 6 years ago)
Original score: 5