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Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/39721
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Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/39721
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You do not make it clear whether your struggle is with the formatting of the lyrics (a question which @Cyn answers) or with structuring the scene, a question which I will attempt to tackle.

_The Lord of the Rings_ is chock-full of characters bursting into song at every opportunity. Tolkien sets up the scene each time, but as for describing the actual singing, he gives the singer little more than a dialogue tag: "he began not to speak but to chant softly" (LotR I, chapter 11 - A Knife in the Dark). "a single voice rose in song" (LotR II, chapter 1 - Many Meetings). Tolkien's poetry stands on its own, because it's good poetry. It produces an effect in the reader. The reader is affected just as the listening hobbits are, so describing the effect on the characters is redundant.

But what if you don't have your own lyrics, whether because you can't write poetry ([a question I asked](https://writing.stackexchange.com/q/36385/14704) a while ago), or because your character is singing something famous in real-life? In that case, you go and describe the singing and/or the listener's impression of the song.

Here's an example, from Diana Wynne Jones's _Cart and Cwidder_, chapter 1:

> They were strange, moody little songs, with odd rhythms. Dagner made them even odder, by singing now loud, now soft, for no real reason, unless it was nerves. And they had a haunting something. The tunes stuck in your head and you hummed them when you thought you had long forgotten them.

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