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Lillia usually arrived to school on her own. The other girls from her hometown got a later train more often than not. She purposefully arrived early to be able to complete homework she had n...
#3: Attribution notice added
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System
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2019-12-08T10:04:08Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
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klippy
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2019-12-08T10:04:08Z (almost 5 years ago)
> Lillia usually arrived to school on her own. The other girls from her hometown got a later train more often than not. She purposefully arrived early to be able to complete homework she had neglected from the night before. Try as she might to complete all her work in the evening, she simply did not have the energy to finish it. There was only so much one person can learn about the different rock layers of the world without losing interest and falling asleep. > > Sometimes, she would bump into Clara and they would walk in together, but this only happened infrequently. She recognised a few other girls from her year on the train, but she wasn't friendly with any of them, and neither party even recognised the other's existence. I'm trying to learn to spot exposition in my writing. Should I restructure the whole section? Is a small amount of exposition okay?
#1: Imported from external source
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System
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2018-11-02T13:20:29Z (about 6 years ago)
Original score: 4