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The amount of exposition appears totally fine to me. But I think you're using more words than you need to in order to provide it. I would cut the length of the section in half, and probably put i...
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#4: Attribution notice removed
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2019-12-20T00:40:32Z (about 5 years ago)
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#3: Attribution notice added
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2019-12-08T10:04:09Z (about 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
The amount of exposition appears totally fine to me. But I think you're using more words than you need to in order to provide it. I would cut the length of the section in half, and probably put it into a single paragraph. You're giving good background and insight into this character, especially that she doesn't really have any school friends. And you let the reader know a bit about how school and transportation to school work here (fairly normal stuff but these things do differ a lot around the world). That's what exposition is for; to fill in gaps.
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2018-11-02T14:33:49Z (about 6 years ago)
Original score: 3