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Q&A How to avoid mentioning the name of a character?

Have the narrator tell the action in that place, not show it. Then show Old Man's reaction. Example: "Nothing gives you the right to do this." Old Man sat back down in his chair, hoping Taylor...

posted 6y ago by Cyn‭  ·  last activity 5y ago by System‭

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#4: Attribution notice removed by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-20T00:40:32Z (almost 5 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/40107
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#3: Attribution notice added by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-08T10:10:28Z (almost 5 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/40107
License name: CC BY-SA 3.0
License URL: https://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/
#2: Initial revision by (deleted user) · 2019-12-08T10:10:28Z (almost 5 years ago)
Have the narrator tell the action in that place, not show it. Then show Old Man's reaction.

Example:

"Nothing gives you the right to do this."

Old Man sat back down in his chair, hoping Taylor would take the hint and go. Instead, he bent over so close Old Man smelled beer and onions on his breath. Then Taylor whispered something Old Man had last heard from his wife's dying lips. Too many years to count.

"How?..." Old Man asked him.

Taylor stood. "I know more than you think. More than just your name, Old Man."

And so on...

#1: Imported from external source by user avatar System‭ · 2018-11-13T17:12:34Z (about 6 years ago)
Original score: 71