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Q&A Phrasing to balance immense speed with boredom

Through much of my novel the protagonist spends considerable time cruising over various landscapes at speeds exceeding 500 km/h. To you or me this is significant but to the character, it's "just a ...

2 answers  ·  posted 6y ago by Brian Lacy‭  ·  last activity 5y ago by System‭

#3: Attribution notice added by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-08T10:11:59Z (almost 5 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/q/40206
License name: CC BY-SA 3.0
License URL: https://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/
#2: Initial revision by user avatar Brian Lacy‭ · 2019-12-08T10:11:59Z (almost 5 years ago)
Through much of my novel the protagonist spends considerable time cruising over various landscapes at speeds exceeding 500 km/h. To you or me this is significant but to the character, it's "just a job."

The obvious phrases like "he sped" or "they raced" are going to get old quick in this context. I want the reader to experience the thrill of flying across the land at thrilling speeds, without betraying the routineness of it for the pilot. For example, "Focusing on the muffled whistle of air screaming across the hull outside, he watched hypnotic streaks of greenery flowed endlessly below the craft and allowed his mind to sink into a sort of lazy trance."

But I'm struggling to keep each "update" fresh, or to avoid irritating repetition. Thoughts?

#1: Imported from external source by user avatar System‭ · 2018-11-17T22:05:04Z (almost 6 years ago)
Original score: 5