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Q&A Should I change my method of indicating internal monologue (parenthesis) to something more conventional?

Yes! Change it! When I saw the title my first thought was, do whatever you want, as long as it works. Then I read the question...and...it doesn't work. It's very distracting. If you use it...

posted 6y ago by Cyn‭  ·  last activity 5y ago by System‭

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#4: Attribution notice removed by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-20T00:40:34Z (about 5 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/40774
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#3: Attribution notice added by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-08T10:22:19Z (about 5 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/40774
License name: CC BY-SA 3.0
License URL: https://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/
#2: Initial revision by (deleted user) · 2019-12-08T10:22:19Z (about 5 years ago)
 **Yes! Change it!**

When I saw the title my first thought was, do whatever you want, as long as it works. Then I read the question...and...it doesn't work. It's very distracting.

If you use italics, you can take out the "he thought to himself" bits, which are generally clutter. Or you can do it in unmarked text in certain cases.

Given that the internal thoughts are in first person and the narration is in third person, I would encourage you to use italics. No markup needs a bit more finesse.

#1: Imported from external source by user avatar System‭ · 2018-12-17T16:04:15Z (about 6 years ago)
Original score: 5