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Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/41558
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Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/41558
License name: CC BY-SA 3.0
License URL: https://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/

You have a few choices here:

**1. You can group each person's actions together more** (I've also edited a couple errors).

> The tall figure was overwhelmingly tall. It stood in the corner of the room then moved to the opposite side of the room and started palpating the wall, as if it was looking for something. Then it started laughing loudly and clapping its hands as if it were overjoyed.
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> The skinny figure sat right beside the tall one on a chair. It wasn't moving at all. It then started crawling and palpating the floor as if it were looking for something. When the tall figure was laughing and clapping the skinny figure started doing the same.

**2. You can name the characters.** If you don't want to use real names, try the characteristics.

> Tall was overwhelmingly tall. It stood in the corner of the room. Skinny right beside it sat on a chair. It wasn't moving at all. Tall moved to the opposite side of the room and started palpating the wall as if it was looking for something. Skinny then started crawling and palpating the floor as if it were looking for something. Tall then started laughing loudly and clapping its hands as if it were overjoyed. Skinny hearing this started doing the same.

**3. You can make them different genders.** Instead of making them both "it" (with some accidental? "he" in there), make one "he" and one "she."

> The tall figure was overwhelmingly tall. He stood in the corner of the room. The skinny figure right beside him sat on a chair. She wasn't moving at all. He moved to the opposite side of the room and started palpating the wall as if he was looking for something. She then started crawling and palpating the floor as if she were looking for something. He then started laughing loudly and clapping his hands as if he were overjoyed. Hearing this, she started doing the same.

Original score: 38