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Q&A Showing that a character is in pain in a dialogue

If you are in pain, you will have a hard time concentrating, which can make a conversation a bit disjointed. You will pause, catch your breath, maybe close your eyes. You will stumble over words,...

posted 5y ago by Cyn‭  ·  last activity 5y ago by System‭

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#4: Attribution notice removed by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-20T00:40:37Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#3: Attribution notice added by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-08T10:47:10Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision by (deleted user) · 2019-12-08T10:47:10Z (almost 5 years ago)
If you are in pain, you will have a hard time concentrating, which can make a conversation a bit disjointed.

You will pause, catch your breath, maybe close your eyes.

You will stumble over words, stutter, put out the wrong word, correct yourself, maybe forget the word you're looking for. Stop. Shake the head. Move on.

Syllables may break a part. One. Word. At. A. Time. Then a blast of words all together in a rush with a sigh at the effort of it all.

Punctuate with damn, God, oh, a sharp intake of breath. The rhythm of speaking. Is off. Off. Can't really. Words aren't clear. Doesn't matter, the order, doesn't matter. Repeat yourself. Breathe. Start the phrase on a new word. Leave out everything but the core important part. You won't notice if your listener doesn't understand.

Questions don't matter. The conversation is what you need to convey. Eyes down. Other people are a fog. You only hope that your words reach them. But you don't know. You continue speaking because you don't know if you got through.

#1: Imported from external source by user avatar System‭ · 2019-02-04T03:31:36Z (over 5 years ago)
Original score: 12