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Run on sentences are sentences without a pause. No place to take a breath. By using what might otherwise be a run on sentence as free verse poetry, you are creating those pauses. You have some c...
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2019-12-08T10:49:38Z (about 5 years ago)
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Run on sentences are sentences without a pause. No place to take a breath. By using what might otherwise be a run on sentence as free verse poetry, you are creating those pauses. You have some commas in there, which always helps, but it's the line breaks that really give you a place to breathe. Commas alone (or commas plus dashes and semi-colons) aren't enough breathing space for a very long expression. You need those periods. A line break (or stanza break) isn't punctuation per say, but it acts as such in a poem. Poems don't have to conform to the same grammar restrictions of prose. Giving the illusion of a single thought without a break, while simultaneously providing those breaks, is a very effective use of language.
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2019-02-07T00:10:13Z (almost 6 years ago)
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