Post History
If your issue is with the telling of the passing of time, then you could try to show it. This is done by relating events or facts that the reader know would take a certain amount of time to happen...
Answer
#4: Attribution notice removed
by
System
·
2019-12-18T21:34:22Z (over 4 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/42256 License name: CC BY-SA 3.0 License URL: https://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/
#3: Attribution notice added
by
System
·
2019-12-08T10:53:40Z (over 4 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/42256 License name: CC BY-SA 3.0 License URL: https://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/
#2: Initial revision
If your issue is with the _telling_ of the passing of time, then you could try to _show_ it. This is done by relating events or facts that the reader know would take a certain amount of time to happen. I give you some examples: One season, or one year: > The trees were already pushing their flowers out of the buds when MC arrived at Famous Village. A few years: > The last remedy to lice was to shave her head. She cried and MC could do nothing but to stare at her bald head from the window. "Hello" she said one day. She had grown her hair to the shoulder, and wore it in tight locks. A few decades: > Eclipses are rare. It was the second they were looking at, and mom's hair had turned white in the meantime. Years: > The sow had made three litters. And from these, one piglet had grown into a fat and prolific sow too. MC was struggling to keep her last newborns at bay. Couple of days/weeks: > The coach returned to London ten times before it brought news of MC's uncle sickness. Moments: > The door slammed. The feet rushed down the stairs. There she was again, opening that damned door.
#1: Imported from external source
by
System
·
2019-02-15T13:15:47Z (about 5 years ago)
Original score: 2