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Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/42567
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Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/42567
License name: CC BY-SA 3.0
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When describing the scenery, your goal isn't only to convey dry information (there are houses, there are trees, etc.). **Your goal is to evoke some emotion, some feeling.** Your key to extending the description of the scenery is therefore in what feeling you wish to evoke.

For example, I look at a desert - miles and miles of yellow dunes stretching before me. All same-y, you could say. But how do I feel? Am I in awe of the beauty, the colours, the magnificence and sheer size of God's creation? In such a case, description would focus on the colours, the play of light and shade, the changing patterns of the sand.  
Am I apprehensive, because I need to cross this desert, and there's the risk of getting lost, and while I _should_ have enough water, I can afford no accidents, and who knows what's hiding in there? In such a case, the description would focus on the heat, and how I can see nothing but sand stretching to the horizon, and the sun beats on my face (a violent verb).

If you describe a city, are the buildings tall and oppressive, the streets narrow, the air stifling, do you feel small, do you feel you do not belong in this city?  
Or are the tall buildings straining to touch the sky, a proud testimony to man's ingenuity, and you're excited to walk among them?

If you're describing "home", do you wish to evoke a sense of comfort and warmth, or a sense of boring familiarity one's eager to leave on an adventure?

**Start from what you wish to evoke, and then find in the scenery the elements that support that feeling**. You can use sight, sounds, smell, temperature, your character can be reminded of something, but it all should paint one image, one emotion.

Original score: 25