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It isn't exactly empty; a spreading circle of fire might look like a growing crown; with high fire on the perimeter and no fire in the middle. (But ending with "on its way" throws me, it should be ...
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2019-12-19T22:13:40Z (about 5 years ago)
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#3: Attribution notice added
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2019-12-08T11:02:23Z (about 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
It isn't exactly empty; a spreading circle of fire might look like a growing crown; with high fire on the perimeter and no fire in the middle. (But ending with "on its way" throws me, it should be "consuming everything in its way"). That said, aside from your example, if your metaphor is obscure and has no obvious application to what is being described, then it breaks the flow of reading because the reader struggles to reconcile this. That would be bad style.
#1: Imported from external source
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2019-02-26T23:25:43Z (almost 6 years ago)
Original score: 22