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This isn't bad style "A crown of fire" is a an evocative statement full of imagery and connotations. Instantly, I can imagine the burning ring of flame, progressing outward and reaching up to the ...
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2019-12-20T00:53:24Z (almost 5 years ago)
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2019-12-08T11:02:27Z (almost 5 years ago)
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# This isn't bad style _"A crown of fire"_ is a an evocative statement full of imagery and connotations. Instantly, I can imagine the burning ring of flame, progressing outward and reaching up to the sky. The sentence may not make literal sense but certainly is a good description. In contrast _"a circle of fire"_ seems somewhat lame. It describes the physical shape of the fire (potentially 'ring' would be better) but it does little to describe the appearance of the flame. More generally there isn't really such a thing as "bad style" just different style. Whether this is good or not depends on if it fits into the style and structure of the rest of your work. A single empty metaphor in an otherwise literal piece will feel out of place. But if your work is full of this type of description then it will be fine.
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2019-02-26T23:26:50Z (over 5 years ago)
Original score: 17