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I would name it once. Have the viewpoint character notice the panic on the other character's face. It can be near the beginning or closer to the middle of the scene. Maybe later. By "scene" I m...
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2019-12-20T00:40:39Z (over 4 years ago)
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#3: Attribution notice added
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2019-12-08T11:03:08Z (over 4 years ago)
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**I would name it once.** Have the viewpoint character notice the panic on the other character's face. It can be near the beginning or closer to the middle of the scene. Maybe later. By "scene" I mean the section where the panic is actually happening (which could be late in the actual scene). Then throw in a few things the character is doing or saying. - Body freezing up. - Taking a beat or two longer than normal to reply verbally. - Taking a little extra time to respond physically (like missing a ball that is thrown). - Looking around nervously (or just the eyes). - Stammering. - Saying things s/he might not normally say, especially things like making promises or suggestions or giving away a minor secret. - Signs of stress in the body: red face, sweat, muscles weak, needing to sit down suddenly. - Panic also goes together with fear so you can mention fear as well if you wish.
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2019-02-27T17:55:07Z (about 5 years ago)
Original score: 4