How do I introduce this character?
I am writing a story these days and I want to introduce a character who is similar to a king. This character is introduced with heavy announcements by his minions who scream out words of admiration and basically annoy everyone in their path. How do I introduce the character in such a way that the reader is annoyed by the minions presence while also making the protagonist also personally feel annoyed by the nuisance.
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Use the narrator as a tool to avoid annoying the reader. The narrator controls the flow of information.
Have the minions do their thing. Once. Then...
The crowd clapped politely as the ruler walked by. The minions started up again with the "isn't he amazing" bit and the clapping began to fade. The ruler walked on. Couldn't they at least go far enough so that no one's heard it already? This time the ruler managed about 15 feet before the drone of his accomplishments began again. He felt like running but forced himself to stay a few feet behind his announcers. "His great intelligence and thoughtfulness..." God save me, he thought. Maybe I can duck out behind that food stand.
You don't want to actually annoy your readers. You want your readers to realize how annoying those characters are. Big difference.
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