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Just a scene I pictured- (Character receives a syringe in the chest but doesn't feel the after pain until a moment later) Ex: Johnny begins to feel a burning like sensation in his chest that's mor...
#3: Attribution notice added
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System
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2019-12-08T11:31:43Z (over 4 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/q/44061 License name: CC BY-SA 3.0 License URL: https://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/
#2: Initial revision
by
york
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2019-12-08T11:31:43Z (over 4 years ago)
Just a scene I pictured- (Character receives a syringe in the chest but doesn't feel the after pain until a moment later) Ex: Johnny begins to feel a burning like sensation in his chest that's more painful than a gunshot. It forces him to fall down on the ground and hit his head, bear in mind Johnny's like 6'1. Then the pain travels up to his brain and causes him to scream in pain. Shortly after he blacks out I'm having trouble describing this in first person present because it's kind of difficult for me to describe pain in a story in this way.
#1: Imported from external source
by
System
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2019-03-26T17:27:06Z (about 5 years ago)
Original score: 4