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Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/44245
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Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/44245
License name: CC BY-SA 3.0
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Yes, you can use a third person narrator in this way.

In fact, this approach can be used somewhat liberally, to describe a thought process that may be difficult to form into distinct mental sentences, or feels too long when that is done, or feels artificial. An example might be to skip any internal monologue about what somebody said, and instead write: _She tried to make sense of this, and failed._

Stating a thought by the narrator can also tone down the impact or intensity of the thought; and can make it seem more realistic. In your example, "questions in the mind" like _"is it okay to ask"_ are not always formulated into crisp grammatical thoughts, they can be on the borderline between a thought and a feeling, or a combination of those, and are better described.

This approach is also useful when the character is having multiple simultaneous thoughts; as we often do IRL when under stress or pressure. Conveying what it is like to wonder about two or three competing ideas or worries, as one might in battle or an emergency, is best done in prose, not serialized individual thoughts. (IRL science shows us that thoughts in words come _after_ processes in non-words; and that non-verbal thinking can occur on several tracks in parallel.)

This 'stated thought' approach is fine, it is a tool like anything else. Notice the difference between making the thought explicit in the character's head, and having the narrator state what is in the character's head. The former feels more intimate and immediate. That isn't always what you want; in fact (IMO) direct mental access is something you want to dole out to the reader, when it is important to maximize the impact of the thought -- And if you maximize _everything,_ you have maximized _nothing,_ it is like writing in all caps. Use whichever approach you think best conveys the scene.

However, I **do not think** this gives a 3rd person narrator (3PN) license to ask questions on their own behalf; that changes them into a first person narrator, and shifting back and forth between narration styles is confusing.

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