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+1 colmde. I'd say you can just be careful with your wording, so technically you did not lie to the reader. Don't have the narrator call him "the boss". I will add an example: The fat man liste...
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2019-12-19T22:13:46Z (over 4 years ago)
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2019-12-08T11:55:58Z (over 4 years ago)
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+1 colmde. I'd say you can just be careful with your wording, so technically you did not lie to the reader. Don't have the narrator call him "the boss". I will add an example: > The fat man listened to the piece in his ear, then said, "The boss will be here in a minute. Show some respect." > > MC said nothing, he just took his seat. A gray-haired man entered; MC noted not a hair out of place, manicured, his suit and shoes looked tailored and expensive. > > The fat man said, "Boss," and lowered his eyes. > > _Finally,_ thought the MC. _This is the man to kill._ > > The gray-haired man took his seat. "Alright. Here I am. You got three minutes to tell me why I shouldn't tell Bobby here to bag your head and shoot it. Will you do that for me, Bobby?" > > The fat man said, "Yes sir. Three minutes." > > "Good man. Wait until I tell you." He turned to meet MC's eyes. Not a blink. Completely relaxed and expressionless, a psychopath in waiting.
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2019-05-20T14:20:22Z (almost 5 years ago)
Original score: 13