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A few alternatives: She dived into the flower. She dived into the zinnia's flower. She dived into the petals. She dived into the zinnia's center. Or, simply: She dived into...
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#4: Attribution notice removed
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System
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2019-12-20T00:40:45Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#3: Attribution notice added
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System
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2019-12-08T12:10:38Z (about 5 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/45938 License name: CC BY-SA 3.0 License URL: https://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/
#2: Initial revision
A few alternatives: > She dived into the flower. > > She dived into the zinnia's flower. > > She dived into the petals. > > She dived into the zinnia's center. Or, simply: > She dived into the pollen. Add the rolling in pollen parts if needed. I realize you want to differentiate between zinnia the plant and the actual flower. You don't want your readers thinking she's going to be hiding under the leaves. Both "head" and "heart" have other connotations; using either of those terms might pull the reader out of the story. My guess is that your story is for children (because of the butterfly character). If this is the case, then you really want your language to be clear and easy to follow. In any case, avoid terms that aren't perfectly clear.
#1: Imported from external source
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System
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2019-06-12T15:32:50Z (over 5 years ago)
Original score: 7