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Have you considered doing something like skipping, then describing? Something like (but do consider this first draft quality): The man kept the gun pointed at her. Jane had trained for years, ...
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#4: Attribution notice removed
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2019-12-11T18:55:50Z (over 4 years ago)
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#3: Attribution notice added
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2019-12-08T12:11:26Z (over 4 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
Have you considered doing something like skipping, _then_ describing? Something like (but do consider this first draft quality): > The man kept the gun pointed at her. Jane had trained for years, and knew exactly what to do. Moving swiftly and confidently, she wrestled the gun from his hand. The man had been completely unprepared for her hitting his wrist, and it had given her just the fraction of a second she needed to grab the barrel and twist the gun out of his hand and into her own. She held the gun firmly and pointed it at her opponent. "Roles reversed", she thought to herself. This gets the initial change in situation across _quickly_, before the reader learns in more detail how it happened. Not entirely unlike how a well-trained individual might actually approach something like that, as a largely automatic action.
#1: Imported from external source
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System
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2019-06-13T13:44:02Z (almost 5 years ago)
Original score: 31