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Should we avoid repeating redundant information after a dialogue and is there a way around this? Sometimes, you feel prompted to write the description of an action that follows a line, but that als...
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System
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2019-12-08T12:25:49Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
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blackbird
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2019-12-08T12:25:49Z (almost 5 years ago)
Should we avoid repeating redundant information after a dialogue and is there a way around this? Sometimes, you feel prompted to write the description of an action that follows a line, but that also seems to be redundant, and it leads to some pretty bad prose. How would you work around this? For example: > " **Here's the chip** in question." he said as he **handed the chip** to him. "It's a very old chip, make sure you take care of it." Sounds redundant, but the fact he's handing it is also important somewhat, or can be important for what may follow. What would you do in this situation?
#1: Imported from external source
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System
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2019-07-12T02:10:21Z (over 5 years ago)
Original score: 18