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Q&A Should you avoid redundant information after dialogue?

Should you avoid redundancy? Yes. How do you get around this? Cut the redundant part and show only the new information. Infinitezero has already given a good example on that. "Here's the chi...

posted 5y ago by Liquid‭  ·  last activity 5y ago by System‭

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#4: Attribution notice removed by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-13T11:56:53Z (about 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision by (deleted user) · 2019-12-08T12:25:56Z (about 5 years ago)
## Should you avoid redundancy?

Yes.

## How do you get around this?

Cut the redundant part and show only the new information.[Infinitezero](https://writing.stackexchange.com/a/46559) has already given a good example on that.

> "Here's the chip in question." He pulled it out from his pocket with slow, deliberate gestures. He gave out the impression of an elephant trying to move bohemian crystal around. "It's a very old one, make sure you take care of it".

As you can see, I've omitted "he said", since here it can be implied neatly. If there's nothing new to tell, you don't have to make it up:

> "Here's the chip in question." He said. "It's a very old one, make sure you take care of it".

Here the pause is still effective, since it cuts the dialogue lines. The lack of further information leaves the reader imagining the chip being passed.

#1: Imported from external source by user avatar System‭ · 2019-07-12T08:46:34Z (over 5 years ago)
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