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Q&A 1st person addressing a narrator

I'm in agreement with Amadeus here. It's just not a technique that is going to work. I'm trying to think of an exception, and I can't. Already you're messing with things by having the 1st pers...

posted 5y ago by Cyn‭  ·  last activity 5y ago by System‭

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#4: Attribution notice removed by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-20T00:40:46Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#3: Attribution notice added by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-08T12:26:38Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision by (deleted user) · 2019-12-08T12:26:37Z (almost 5 years ago)
I'm in agreement with Amadeus here. It's just not a technique that is going to work. I'm trying to think of an exception, and I can't.

Already you're messing with things by having the 1st person narration know what's in Jason's head. Since the main character is telling this part of the story, s/he shouldn't know what Jason is thinking of and it makes zero sense to include it.

Maybe first person isn't right for you. Maybe you really want a narrator that can zip in and out of various characters' heads. That is fine. But it's not what you're doing.

## Focus on clarifying your narrative and your story will be a lot stronger.
#1: Imported from external source by user avatar System‭ · 2019-07-13T17:03:32Z (over 5 years ago)
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