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The superficial problem is whether the readers will care about this character, but the deeper problem is YOU don't care about him. You even describe him as "it" --there's no emotional investment h...
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#3: Attribution notice added
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System
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2019-12-08T12:33:20Z (about 5 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/46898 License name: CC BY-SA 3.0 License URL: https://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/
#2: Initial revision
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Chris Sunami
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2019-12-08T12:33:20Z (about 5 years ago)
The superficial problem is whether the readers will care about this character, but **the deeper problem is YOU don't care about him**. You even describe him as "it" --there's no emotional investment here. It's fine to start telling your story at the point where the father is killed, but **you need to have done the mental work of imagining his back story** , and his life with his daughter --all the tender and the tough moments. **Otherwise, their relationship will seem thin, insubstantial and emotionally uncompelling**. Your mistake here --a very common one --is to assume that just because you aren't putting it on the page, you don't need to think about it.
#1: Imported from external source
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System
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2019-07-25T15:49:15Z (over 5 years ago)
Original score: 5