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I wrote a passage where one of my characters heard beats, (i.e., the sound) then he found the beating object and, when he held it in his hand, it started throbbing like a heart, (i.e., the feeling)...
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System
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2019-12-08T12:40:57Z (about 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
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vanity
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2019-12-08T12:40:57Z (about 5 years ago)
I wrote a passage where one of my characters heard beats, (i.e., the sound) then he found the beating object and, when he held it in his hand, it started throbbing like a heart, (i.e., the feeling). Here is the passage for more clarity: > ...a faint beating sound reached his ringing ears, “dub… dub… dub… dub… dub…” It was like the pulsing of a weak struggling heart, coming slowly but steadily back to life....... That thing was literally throbbing in his hand... My question is, how can I convey these two different meanings (the beating sound first) then (the throbbing or pulsing feeling second) then the two of them together (sound and sense) when the words: "beat", "pulse," and "throb" are used synonymously?
#1: Imported from external source
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System
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2019-08-09T16:12:38Z (over 5 years ago)
Original score: 4