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There are several options. Others have hit on some really good ones, but here's a few more: One, use short, emotionally-heavy words with (im)proper inflection. Two, you could break the scene dow...
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System
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2019-12-08T12:49:43Z (over 4 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
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Carduus
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2019-12-08T12:49:43Z (over 4 years ago)
There are several options. Others have hit on some really good ones, but here's a few more: One, use short, emotionally-heavy words with (im)proper inflection. Two, you could break the scene down into connected vignettes or a montage, as the adrenaline surge of strong emotion can distort our perception of time. Three, as an extreme, you could even break into first person describing third person, as people in stressful or violent situations sometimes feel 'disconnected' and as if they're watching themself act.
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System
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2019-08-28T15:08:33Z (over 4 years ago)
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