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My main concern is this part: I didn't mention these things anywhere else in the novel. Didn't give the reader details about these lilllahi birds, Bettornim flowers, gaijamu flowers, etc. Wha...
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#3: Attribution notice added
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System
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2019-12-08T12:58:55Z (over 4 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/48088 License name: CC BY-SA 4.0 License URL: https://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/4.0/
#2: Initial revision
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Lot
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2019-12-08T12:58:55Z (over 4 years ago)
My main concern is this part: > I didn't mention these things anywhere else in the novel. Didn't give the reader details about these lilllahi birds, Bettornim flowers, gaijamu flowers, etc. What I really love about fantasy books, is if I get to remember small recurring elements. I would not immediatly say what those lilllahi birds look like. But if you mention them five times throughout the book (giving a small detail each time), I might or might not remember that they were mentioned already. However, if I do remember, I will be happy to get a clearer picture, and be proud that I remembered them from earlier.
#1: Imported from external source
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System
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2019-09-20T13:02:08Z (over 4 years ago)
Original score: 5