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Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/q/48501
License name: CC BY-SA 4.0
License URL: https://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/4.0/

My experience tells me that a disproportionate number of wannabe writers are prudes. I recently wrote a scene where a female character is watching TV. The build up is complicated so I'll have to explain: a traumatic event has eviscerated character's libido. After 'dirty dancing' with a girlfriend in a night-club, that 'loving feeling' is coming back.

She finds herself home alone watching TV. The scene shows her reaction and thoughts as to what she's seeing on the screen.

> Finally home, after an awkward, perplexing day. Cindy won't be home for a while yet. She said she had a _thing_. _Me time_ is something that's been missing in my life. I take advantage of the opportunity of being home alone. I'm relaxing on the sofa, tucked under my duvet, watching a movie. Normally I skip the sex scenes but today my interest is super-piqued. _OMG!_ These two aren't even going to make to the bedroom. "Hell yeah!" I pump a fist. My girl's ripped his shirt off, buttons flying everywhere. "Woah!" He's hoisted her up onto the kitchen counter. Oh my. She's gone straight for the belt buckle. _You go, Girlfriend, you goin' git it now! C'mon hit that bitch hard - give her some what for!_ My appetite has returned - with interest. I know my body. I'm certain Aunt Flo will be here by the morning, and a little Piggly Wiggly before she gets here will tide me over until the coast is clear. It's been a while. Just when I've slipped my hand into my panties and I'm thinking about slamming my cl\*t raw, I hear a key in the door.  
> _Dammit. She's early._ I quickly reach for the remote with my free hand and turn off the TV.
> 
> "Hi," Cindy says, stepping into the lounge.
> 
> "Hi," I squeak, stilling my middle finger. "You're home early. I thought you had a thing?"
> 
> "I did, and it was to say the least – enlightening."
> 
> "Is that so?"
> 
> "Are you okay?" she asks, removing her coat. "You look kinda flushed."
> 
> _Two minutes. I just needed two minutes!_ With her back turned to me I reluctantly pull my finger out of my pussy. "I'm fine."
> 
> "Did you feed the fish?" she asks, hovering by the tank.
> 
> "I was just about to," I reply.

So that's what I wrote . . . People lost their minds! In my defence, the scene she's watching can be seen in any RomCom and her thoughts and actions are not out of place on any popular TV show.

Why the outrage?

Original score: 5