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One way to shorten a piece of writing effectively is to remove any duplication. Sometimes, we repeat something for effect, to highlight how important it is, but it can be effective to remove dupl...
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System
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2019-12-08T13:15:33Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
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Jonathan Moore
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2019-12-08T13:15:33Z (almost 5 years ago)
One way to shorten a piece of writing effectively is to remove any duplication. Sometimes, we repeat something for effect, to highlight how important it is, but it can be effective to remove duplication to make writing 'punchier'. To find duplication, you can look for places where very similar expressions occur next to each other in the same sentence, or follow each other very closely. For instance, the words `disguise` and `conceal` in the first sentence are slightly redundant - both expressions express a very similar concept. If you need to shorten the piece you could try removing one of these expressions. If you leave out `'s just a disguise to`, and change `conceal` to `conceals`, the sentence is stronger for being punchier, without losing meaning:_Panda's peaceful appearance conceals its disturbing inner world._ This sentence allows the reader's mind to complete the picture - it is clear that the peaceful appearence is a disguise, without needing to say it.
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System
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2019-11-26T14:27:29Z (almost 5 years ago)
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