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Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/4327
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I don't think this is really a problem with the story being in first person. Regardless of the POV you use, you need to be able to really understand your characters, and you need to present that understanding in a way that feels genuine.

I think you need to decide whether there _is_ something wrong, or if you just _think_ there's something wrong. So, as John said, I'd get someone to read it for you. Preferably several someones, because, guess what? Women aren't monolithic. Every woman thinks differently.

So find out if there's a problem. If there isn't - if your betas tell you that they believed in the characters - excellent! Get back to work.

If there _is_ a problem, try to get details on what it is, but also try to think of your characters as whole people. Yeah, okay, they're women, but what _else_ are they? What has made them who they are? Their sex will have had more or less influence on their character depending on what society they grew up in, what their family was like, etc., but I don't think there's ever been a time or place where being female was _all_ they would have been. Look at all of it, try to understand how it all fits together and influences everything else, and then try again.

Good luck with it!

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