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I am trying to write a sentence that tells the reader that the works displayed that they are about to see will bring them back and forth between the real and virtual realms, in a figurative manner....
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System
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2019-12-08T02:14:51Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
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xenon
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2019-12-08T02:14:51Z (almost 5 years ago)
I am trying to write a sentence that tells the reader that the works displayed that they are about to see will bring them _back and forth_ between the real and virtual realms, in a figurative manner. The "borders" that I mentioned in the statement reflects some of the earlier references in the paragraph. This is the sentence that I wrote: > The displayed works will set forth its viewers through a journey from the physical, passing the borders, into the virtual realm and back. The sentence is somewhat complicated since I attempt to throw in quite a few ideas together. The phrase _back and forth_, in particular, is split into "set forth..." and then "back" at the last part of the sentence. I am not sure if my sentence construction is correct and if the sentence delivers my intended meaning. Somehow, I find my phrasing slightly awkward. Is there anything wrong with my sentence construction/pattern that causes it to sound awkward or lose its intended meaning?
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System
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2012-03-09T13:11:20Z (over 12 years ago)
Original score: 6