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I have a horrific habit I'm finding it very difficult to break. A disturbingly large portion of my sentences consist of the same structure-- two parts separated by "and." I don't know how to break ...
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2019-12-08T02:15:49Z (almost 5 years ago)
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2019-12-08T02:15:49Z (almost 5 years ago)
I have a horrific habit I'm finding it very difficult to break. A disturbingly large portion of my sentences consist of the same structure-- two parts separated by "and." I don't know how to break the habit. Please help. Example: After awhile our words subsided, **and** I commented on a picture of his dog which hung on the wall over the television. This immediately invoked considerable excitement in him, **and** he asked me if I would like to see better. I uncertainly answered Yes, **and** he rose from the couch **and** headed for a doorway to the left.
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2012-03-20T17:14:21Z (over 12 years ago)
Original score: 3