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Rather than "deployed": helped to launch I've no idea what an "enterprise application" is, so perhaps that could be rephrased. The problem with "he is an advocate for agile software development p...
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2019-12-13T12:00:07Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#3: Attribution notice added
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2019-12-08T02:17:11Z (almost 5 years ago)
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Rather than "deployed": helped to launch I've no idea what an "enterprise application" is, so perhaps that could be rephrased. The problem with "he is an advocate for agile software development practices" is that "agile software development" is an actual jargon phrase. If you don't want it to mess up your readability score, you have to rephrase it entirely as something like "clean and efficient coding," which may not have the same meaning. Rather than "a .NET evangelist," try "and the use of .NET." Rather than "and both developers and management seek out his perspective on software development," maybe "making his opinions welcome to those at all skill levels."
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2012-04-05T16:34:29Z (over 12 years ago)
Original score: 2