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Q&A Critique My Poem Please! [closed]

I really need someone to critique this poem for me. It's for a Poem Portfolio in my Creative Writing Class. I just need some help on where to include things like imagery, sensory details, similes, ...

0 answers  ·  posted 11y ago by Emma Klein‭  ·  last activity 4y ago by System‭

Question poetry revision
#3: Attribution notice added by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-08T02:36:35Z (over 4 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/q/6768
License name: CC BY-SA 3.0
License URL: https://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/
#2: Initial revision by user avatar Emma Klein‭ · 2019-12-08T02:36:35Z (over 4 years ago)
I really need someone to critique this poem for me. It's for a Poem Portfolio in my Creative Writing Class. I just need some help on where to include things like imagery, sensory details, similes, metaphors, etc. I would super appreciate if anyone could help me!

**Rock Collection**

It's not like I ever wanted,  
all of these rocks.  
I just don't love him like I used to,  
and now I'm stuck with them.  
I wish I could get rid of them,  
stupid rocks.  
Keep me up at night,  
wear me down by day.  
These rocks are killing me.  
Why can't I just leave them behind?  
Just set them on the ground,  
Leave them and never come back.  
I just can't though,  
no matter how hard I try.  
Why can't I just love him?  
Love him the way I used to.

#1: Imported from external source by user avatar System‭ · 2012-12-10T23:14:04Z (over 11 years ago)
Original score: -2