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The italics indicate that the words are the person's thoughts, so it's almost the same as speech. It's entirely fine. I agree with Joel, however, in reminding you not to overdo it (or any given tec...
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#4: Attribution notice removed
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2019-12-13T12:00:13Z (about 5 years ago)
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#3: Attribution notice added
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2019-12-08T02:38:51Z (about 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
The italics indicate that the words are the person's thoughts, so it's almost the same as speech. It's entirely fine. I agree with Joel, however, in reminding you not to overdo it (or any given technique). (On an entirely separate note, why is she _walking_ down an escalator? Escalators move. Is it broken or does she want to go faster than it's carrying her?)
#1: Imported from external source
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2012-12-29T13:13:23Z (almost 12 years ago)
Original score: 9