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I am in the middle of editing a book where I'm adding this technique, so I endorse it whole-heartedly. :) My two rules are: Don't confuse the reader. Make sure that no matter what, it's clear who...
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2019-12-13T12:00:14Z (about 5 years ago)
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#3: Attribution notice added
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2019-12-08T02:39:44Z (about 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
I am in the middle of editing a book where I'm _adding_ this technique, so I endorse it whole-heartedly. :) My two rules are: 1. Don't confuse the reader. Make sure that no matter what, it's clear who is speaking. This applies to narration, dialogue tags, action tags, and lack thereof of all of them. 2. A new speaker gets a new paragraph, regardless of where the dialogue starts in the paragraph. Your examples follow both these rules, and I quite like them. There's no reason to start Jill's dialogue on its own line in the middle of a narrative paragraph when it's perfectly clear she's the only one speaking. And since she continues to speak without anyone else interrupting her, the second line of dialogue still doesn't need a new paragraph.
#1: Imported from external source
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2013-01-04T20:28:34Z (almost 12 years ago)
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