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Q&A Should dull dialogue be removed completely?

The following dialogue is from a novel I'm writing (first draft): "You're quiet tonight," Erin said to Benjamin, who seemed to be lost in thoughts. He looked up and took a sip of his dri...

4 answers  ·  posted 12y ago by Alexandro Chen‭  ·  last activity 5y ago by System‭

#3: Attribution notice added by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-08T02:43:04Z (almost 5 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/q/7217
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#2: Initial revision by user avatar Alexandro Chen‭ · 2019-12-08T02:43:04Z (almost 5 years ago)
The following dialogue is from a novel I'm writing (first draft):

> "You're quiet tonight," Erin said to Benjamin, who seemed to be lost in thoughts.
> 
> He looked up and took a sip of his drink. "I'm a bit tired, that all."
> 
> "Too much work?"
> 
> "Yeah, it's killing me, you know. My boss should really hire more teachers."
> 
> "Why don't you find something else? You've been doing this for a while. I bet you can find something better."
> 
> "It's hard to find a job these days. What if I quit and can't find another? I don't want to end up sleeping in a park and drink cheap sake from a paper bag."
> 
> Erin laughed. "That would never happen. No matter what, you can always move to my place."
> 
> "I don't think that would be a good idea. You know what they say: living together before marriage kill relationships."
> 
> ...
> 
> "By the way," Erin suddenly said while tracing circles on the rim of her glass, “is that new co-worker bothering you? You know, the one who talks to you all the time."
> 
> Benjamin took a sip of his drink. "What's wrong? You're jealous?"
> 
> "Nah," Erin said, looking to the side, "just asking."
> 
> "She's just talkative, that's all. Besides, she's new. She just want to learn as much as she can."
> 
> "I see," Erin said, half-smiling.
> 
> "You never ask these kind of questions," Benjamin said with a suspicious look. "Is there something wrong?"
> 
> ...
> 
> "That's right," Benjamin said after a moment. "Did you feel the earthquake last night?"
> 
> Erin was about to sip her glass but then stopped. She looked up, and stared at Benjamin with her lips slightly parted. _Am I the only one who missed the earthquake?_ She wondered if she was indeed living in the same city as everyone else.

Each part of the dialogue reveals something about the characters. But I feel the first part is very dull (I guess the second part is more exciting). And the third part is the "climax" of the dialogue.

What should I do in cases like this? Should I remove the dull part completely or should I keep it?

#1: Imported from external source by user avatar System‭ · 2013-02-04T14:08:46Z (almost 12 years ago)
Original score: 8