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I agree with Lauren's answer: You need highs and lows in any story. As long as you're not boring the reader, maybe these excerpts are just low points. But momentum counts for an awful lot, and it...
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2019-12-08T02:43:07Z (almost 5 years ago)
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I agree with [Lauren's answer](https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/7218/26): You need highs and lows in any story. As long as you're not boring the reader, maybe these excerpts are just low points. But momentum counts for an awful lot, and it's difficult to judge how "dull" these actually are out of context. For example, when Benjamin looked at Erin despite being lost in thought, did that have significance? When Erin missed the earthquake, was that typical for her or was it an alarming exception for a character who's normally observant? If you set up these dull moments properly, they might not be as dull as you think.
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2013-02-04T20:17:10Z (over 11 years ago)
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