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If you must go with one of those, I would go with the first one. It just seems to go more smoothly. However, in order to PERFECT the sentence, you may want to try a different technique than simil...
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2019-12-08T02:52:10Z (almost 5 years ago)
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Megan
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2019-12-08T02:52:10Z (almost 5 years ago)
If you must go with one of those, I would go with the first one. It just seems to go more smoothly. However, in order to PERFECT the sentence, you may want to try a different technique than similes. Either way it's really good. Hope this helps!
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2013-05-16T16:47:00Z (over 11 years ago)
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