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I wrote the following: Under the shelter of the inn, a barbecue was taking place, red coal glowing in the dark and tiny sparks fluttering around from time to time. or should I change it t...
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I wrote the following: > Under the shelter of the inn, a barbecue was taking place, **red coal glowing in the dark and tiny sparks fluttering around from time to time.** or should I change it to: > Under the shelter of the inn, a barbecue was taking place. **The red coal glowed in the dark and tiny sparks fluttered around from time to time.** I know I can do this: > She was walking by the shore, her hair fluttering in the wind. But I'm not very sure about the first example.