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Yep, works for me. Particularly if this is the literal opening of the story, not just the scene; I like to establish some sort of setting fairly early on. You don't linger too much. You're giving u...
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2019-12-13T12:00:16Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#3: Attribution notice added
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2019-12-08T02:57:18Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
Yep, works for me. Particularly if this is the literal opening of the story, not just the scene; I like to establish some sort of setting fairly early on. You don't linger too much. You're giving us just enough for us to grasp where she is, and then get back to the dialogue.
#1: Imported from external source
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2013-06-27T11:34:10Z (over 11 years ago)
Original score: 6