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In my current story, a character just came into a room and saw our protagonist standing among a room full of dead bodies. In utter shock and fear (as he had no expectation of this) he proclaimed "W...
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#3: Attribution notice added
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System
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2019-12-08T02:59:24Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
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AnthonyRusso
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2019-12-08T02:59:24Z (almost 5 years ago)
In my current story, a character just came into a room and saw our protagonist standing among a room full of dead bodies. In utter shock and fear (as he had no expectation of this) he proclaimed "What the fuck did you do?" I don't think without the included profanity, the scene works. He hardly is a character to throw around profanity in regular conversation, but he isn't a priest either and if something shocks him, there is every likely it will come forth. Anthony
#1: Imported from external source
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System
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2013-07-18T16:03:30Z (over 11 years ago)
Original score: 4