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Eri knelt down slowly and thought about her world. The one with the solid ground in which she had stood all her life. Would that surface break apart one day? And when it did, what would happ...
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editing
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System
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2019-12-08T03:08:36Z (over 4 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
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Alexandro Chen
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2019-12-08T03:08:36Z (over 4 years ago)
> Eri knelt down slowly and thought about her world. The one with the solid **ground** in which she had stood all her life. Would that surface break apart one day? And when it did, what would happen to her? Perhaps she would end up floating aimlessly in a vast nothingness. Her feet never touching the **ground** again. Her hands never finding anything to hold onto. I've been trying to edit this for about an hour. It's like a chess dilemma I created myself. I can't replace _ground_ with _surface_ because I'm already using it in the next sentence. And it seems like _feet never touching the ground_ is the most natural way of saying it. I think _feet touching the soil_ and _feet touching the land_ sound strange. Does anyone have a simple, effective way to solve this?
#1: Imported from external source
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System
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2013-10-14T08:20:19Z (over 10 years ago)
Original score: 2