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I realized I have the habit of adding small sentences that don't provide much information: Eri searched her memory, but came out blank. She couldn’t even remember what she was doing at that t...
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creative-writing
#3: Attribution notice added
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System
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2019-12-08T03:10:55Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
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Alexandro Chen
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2019-12-08T03:10:55Z (almost 5 years ago)
I realized I have the habit of adding small sentences that don't provide much information: > Eri searched her memory, but came out blank. She couldn’t even remember what she was doing at that time. **Which was odd.** She didn’t consider herself particularly smart, but when it came to remembering things, her brain never failed. > > * * * > > But what struck me the most were her eyes. Even though there was nothing unusual in them, they made her face look expressionless, lifeless. **It felt strange.** Like staring at an empty canvas. (I don't do this all the time. Maybe two or three times per story.) But no matter how I think about it, I feel the paragraphs will lose their flow/rhythm if I remove those short sentences. Is this a bad writing practice? If so, how should I modify the examples above in order to fix the issue?
#1: Imported from external source
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System
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2013-11-12T07:51:49Z (about 11 years ago)
Original score: 1