Communities

Writing
Writing
Codidact Meta
Codidact Meta
The Great Outdoors
The Great Outdoors
Photography & Video
Photography & Video
Scientific Speculation
Scientific Speculation
Cooking
Cooking
Electrical Engineering
Electrical Engineering
Judaism
Judaism
Languages & Linguistics
Languages & Linguistics
Software Development
Software Development
Mathematics
Mathematics
Christianity
Christianity
Code Golf
Code Golf
Music
Music
Physics
Physics
Linux Systems
Linux Systems
Power Users
Power Users
Tabletop RPGs
Tabletop RPGs
Community Proposals
Community Proposals
tag:snake search within a tag
answers:0 unanswered questions
user:xxxx search by author id
score:0.5 posts with 0.5+ score
"snake oil" exact phrase
votes:4 posts with 4+ votes
created:<1w created < 1 week ago
post_type:xxxx type of post
Search help
Notifications
Mark all as read See all your notifications »
Q&A

Is it bad to have sentences that are too long? [closed]

+0
−0

Closed by System‭ on Nov 13, 2013 at 06:00

This question was closed; new answers can no longer be added. Users with the reopen privilege may vote to reopen this question if it has been improved or closed incorrectly.

The sentence in question is:

As players move around the board, they buy, rent and sell properties from and to each other with each player trying to maximize his or her own wealth in a zero-sum game where everyone must lose in order for one player to win

...and I'm wondering if that is clear enough or too wordy.

History
Why does this post require attention from curators or moderators?
You might want to add some details to your flag.
Why should this post be closed?

This post was sourced from https://writers.stackexchange.com/q/9358. It is licensed under CC BY-SA 3.0.

0 comment threads

1 answer

+1
−0

Too long.

Let's add some commas and trim the redundancies:

As players move around the board, they buy, rent, and sell properties from and to each other, with each player trying to maximize his or her own wealth.

Not only does "zero-sum" actually mean "everyone must lose in order for one player to win," pretty much all board games intended for players out of preschool are zero-sum. It's kind of a given that you have one winner and everyone else loses.

History
Why does this post require attention from curators or moderators?
You might want to add some details to your flag.

0 comment threads