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Which is more appropriate: The air carried a bitter chill, but was clear and unpolluted. “Oh wow,” I said. “I know how Black Friday has a reputation for crowds, but this takes it to a new ...
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#3: Attribution notice added
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System
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2019-12-08T03:13:59Z (over 4 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
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Austin Burk
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2019-12-08T03:13:59Z (over 4 years ago)
Which is more appropriate: > _The air carried a bitter chill, but was clear and unpolluted._ > > _“Oh wow,” I said. “I know how Black Friday has a reputation for crowds, but this takes it to a new level!”_ > > _“That’s why we don’t usually go shopping on Black Friday, honey,” my mother replied, squeezing my shoulder, "but I think we can make an exception this time."_ or > _The air, clear and unpolluted, carried a bitter chill._ > > _"Oh, wow," I said. "I know how Black Friday has a reputation for crowds, but this takes it to a new level!"_ > > _"That's why we don't usually go shopping on Black Friday, honey," replied my mother as she squeezed my shoulder, "but I think we can make an exception this time."_ Thank you!
#1: Imported from external source
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System
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2013-12-02T01:19:59Z (over 10 years ago)
Original score: 2